Sunday, March 08, 2009

Say What?

Writing interests me, mostly because I have found so many ways to horse up a sentence beyond recognition. It also interests me because it is fun (to me) to point out weird sentences, like this one from an article on the Final Four coming to Detroit:

January brought a scaled-down auto show, and the nation's biggest decline in occupancy for Detroit-area hotels

“The nation’s biggest decline in occupancy for Detroit-area hotels”?

Are there Detroit-area hotels elsewhere in the nation that declined less than the Detroit-area hotels in, um, the Detroit area did?

Now this author probably means that Detroit-area hotels showed the biggest decline in occupancy rates when compared to occupancy rates across the nation.

But why didn’t she just say that?

1 comment:

Anonymous said...

I'm going to the store with my sister that has the world's largest shoe. After that I'll address your comments.